Was there any part of the draft that was hard to understand or was lacking explanation?
Were the topics of the thesis explained in detail? Was something left out?
Was there anything that stood out that could have been expanded on or anything that could have been left out?
1. Some parts need to be reworded, but overall your draft was very self-explanatory and easy to understand.
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3. I like how you referred to the text alot. It gave the me, the reader, a better understanding of what the original essay is about. You could leave out a couple words every now and then that I have marked, but overall you did a good job!